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toki! Thank you both for your feedback on this! I use both the English Douay-Rheims translation and the Latin Vulgate when translating. Using 'ante la' is actually going against both, as they have 'for' and 'enim' (for, namely) respectively. I thought it would be clear to say 'on the contrary' to 'n...

toki! I'm trying to translate some Bible verses in order to improve my command of tp. I have come up with a translation for Ecclesiastes 1.10 that feels alright to me, but I have some questions about it. English: Nothing under the sun is new, neither is any man able to say: Behold this is new: for i...

pona!

janTepanNetaPelin wrote: Masuo -> Masuwo (anu Matuwo?)

ken la nimi 'Matuwo' li pona. mi lukin e nimi 'Paso' lon lipu ante.

tenpo ni la, mi sitelen e toki musi lili sin pi nasin pi ma Nijon. tenpo kama lili la, mi pana e ona lon lipu ni.

toki! ni li toki musi lili. tenpo pini la, jan Masuo Paso (?) pali e ona. mi pana e toki pona tawa ona. ona li pona tawa sina la, o toki e ni tawa mi! sina wile pona e ona la, o toki e ni kin. kalama ala kalama pipi li tawa insa kiwen shizukasa ya iwa ni shimiiru semi no koe - original stillness-- s...

Hey, does this work?

kama lete la,
waso pimeja li lon
palisa moli

Using one of janTepanNetaPelins suggestions for autumn... I'm not too confident about what works and not when it comes to la-clauses. This is turning the content around a bit, I know, but I'm not averse to that if the result is good.

Sure, if I can find a decent 5-syllable line for the rest of it, I'll make the whole thing 5-7-5 (even though the original has an irregular 9-syllable mid line).

pona! Yes, I think I've come to the conclusion that suno anpa pi tenpo jelo Is taking it a bit to far, and possibly blurring the image. 'Low sun of the yellow time' kind of sounds like a line out of an ancient chinese poem. Which is not completely missing the mark here, but it can be done better. I ...

Have you posted your version of the frog poem anywhere? I'd be very interested to see how that can be done. It was the first haiku I tried to translate, but being a complete beginner, I got stuck on both 'old', 'pond', 'frog' (just akesi maybe?) and 'jump (in)'... :P Kalama telo is clear enough thou...

Ok, thanks! It's nothing important, I just asked what is the sound of water, because I've seen several translations that use onomatopoetic words like 'splash' etc. for the last line. I think that narrows the haiku down a bit, because mizu no oto / the sound of water / kalama telo doesn't necessarily...