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jan.kilen
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kalama musi li insa toki pona

Postby jan.kilen » Fri Apr 12, 2019 9:59 pm

just a little something I put together in tp for my DnD group
suggestions for better translations are always welcome
translations are in italics
(intended to be played on ukulele)

quarter note = 176 (?)

D-DU-UD

Intro
Dm F x2

Dm (F Am)
soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!
soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!
soweli wawa mute, o! Powerful Sheep!
soweli wawa mute, o! Powerful Sheep!

ona li kama tan seli anpa! She came from hell!
ona li pali ike ijo weka! She makes bad things disappear!
ona li suwi en sijelo linja, She cute and fluffy,
taso ona li tawa noka sina! But she’ll knock you out!

soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!
soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!
soweli wawa mute, o! Powerful Sheep!
soweli wawa mute, o! Powerful Sheep!

ali luka taso ona li wawa! No arms but she is strong!
ona li sona tawa pona en She’s got skills to hone and
jan ike mute tawa moli! Monsters to kill!
ona li pali lon anpa tawa sewi She raises hell
poka li ona, a! All around her!

soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!
soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!
soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!

Dm
soweli wawa mute, o! Powerful Sheep!
Dm (let ring)
toki!
kama sona li toki pona awen, toki ken ike
pana pona pakala
I'm still learning Toki Pona, so my speech may be bad
please give corrections for any mistakes

mi tawa, awen pona!

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Re: kalama musi li insa toki pona

Postby KNTRO » Sat Apr 13, 2019 4:24 am

jan Kilen,

toki!

The letter o is used for commands, like o moku! (Eat!) or mi o moku (I should eat). If you want to emphasize something, use a instead, like you did with poka li ona, a!.

By the way, I would love to listen to this song! :mrgreen: There's not much music in Toki Pona, so I'd like to listen to this.
sina toki kepeken toki Epanja la, sina kama pona tawa e kulupu lon ilo Telekan a! ;)

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Re: kalama musi li insa toki pona

Postby janKipo » Sat Apr 13, 2019 10:30 am

jan.kilen wrote:soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!.
As noted, if you are not addressing them, ‘o’ is wrong. If you are addressing them, don’t put a comma be for the ‘o’. If not, use ‘a’. btw ‘mani’ will do as well (or better) for sheep, if the scansion allows.
soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!
soweli wawa mute, o! Powerful Sheep!
This is “many powerful sheep”. You seem to mean ’soweli pi wawa mute’ “very powerful sheep”
soweli wawa mute, o! Powerful Sheep!

ona li kama tan seli anpa! She came from hell!
ona li pali ike ijo weka! She makes bad things disappear!
”Make” is probably “cause”, so ‘kama’. You have "distantly material evil manner”, you want more like ‘kama weka e ike’ “cause bad things to go away”
ona li suwi en sijelo linja, She cute and fluffy,
are cuteness and fluffiness separate things or is it a package, like pork and beans? If they are separate then we have fused predicate, so ‘li’ instead of ‘en’. If they are a package, then ‘en’ is OK, though many would object to it. Sheep have fluffy bodies, but aren’t fluffy bodies, so ’sijelo linja’ is questionable but maybe passes, given the way words shift around in tp.
taso ona li tawa noka sina! But she’ll knock you out!
Literally, “She goes to your feet”. I don’t get the idiom. ‘ona li anpa e sina’ is clearer.

ali luka taso ona li wawa! No arms but she is strong!
not “all arms” but ‘luka ala’. I’m not sure about the elision. of ‘ona li jo e’ but it is probably OK
ona li sona tawa pona en She’s got skills to hone and
jan ike mute tawa moli! Monsters to kill!
This just doesn’t parse (or does but makes no sense) At a guess, ona li jo e sona pi tawa pona e jan ike ...’
ona li pali lon anpa tawa sewi She raises hell
”She works below toward above” I’m not sure what is meant but the closest thing would seem to be ‘ona li tawa e anpa tawa sewi ‘ (or 'ona li tawa sewi e anpa’)
poka li ona, a! All around her!
“a side is her” Seems to want just another prepositional phrase added to the previous line ‘lon poka ali ona’ “on her every side”.


soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!
soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!
soweli utala, o! Battle Sheep!

Dm
soweli wawa mute, o! Powerful Sheep!
Dm (let ring)


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