"nostalgic longing for my childhood walks in the woods with my dog Shadow"

[Baerdric]

"nostalgic longing for my childhood walks in the woods with my dog Shadow"

a, suno li seli.
mi tawa e nasin kasi sin.

Um, I'll have to work on this. I think it's a poem about 20 lines long. Any corrections, suggestions or encouragement appreciated and seriously needed.

[janKipo]

'tawa (or 'noka') lon nasin kasi sin' "walk along a new herbaceous path" 'tawa e nasin' would mean that you moved the path to somewhere else (or at least shook it out in place). The path is new here, not the plants, if that is what you want.

[Baerdric]

I was going for "fresh leaves" but didn't want to use supa. Actually, the newer version I am about to write should move more towards "under the cool vegetation".

tawa lon nasin
anpa e kasi lete.

I'm going to have to go back and review the additional meanings of each word and practice sentence structure more.

[janKipo]

so 'pi lipu sin' "of the fresh leaves"
'(mi) tawa lon nasin
anpa e kasi lete'
doesn't parase and I am unsure what to do with it. The obvious thing is to put 'li' in front of 'anpa' which gives "I go on the path and lower the cold plants" which doesn't seem quite what you want. maybe 'pi lon anpa pi kasi lete' which put the path under the leaves. Without the 'pi' it would put the going there. Your choice.

[janTepanNetaPelin]

jan Loje o,

I'd try this:

mi tawa lon nasin.
ona li lon anpa pi lipu kasi sin.

With a little liberty: lipu kasi sin li lon supa ona.
("fresh leaves are on it's 'bed'.")

or: lipu kasi sin li len ona. / len ona li lipu kasi sin.
("fresh leaves are its cloths.")

mi tawa.