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Re: Seasons

Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2018 11:19 am
by WasoPimeja
Sure, if I can find a decent 5-syllable line for the rest of it, I'll make the whole thing 5-7-5 (even though the original has an irregular 9-syllable mid line).

Re: Seasons

Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2018 12:52 pm
by WasoPimeja
Hey, does this work?

kama lete la,
waso pimeja li lon
palisa moli

Using one of janTepanNetaPelins suggestions for autumn... I'm not too confident about what works and not when it comes to la-clauses. This is turning the content around a bit, I know, but I'm not averse to that if the result is good.

Re: Seasons

Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2018 4:00 pm
by janKipo
Pona mute!

Re: Seasons

Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2018 4:24 am
by WasoPimeja
:)