I'm writing toki pona translations for tatoeba sentences and come up with the phrase...
mi pilin ike tawa pali e moku. en sina pilin seme?
What do you think about it? Is it ok or not and if not how to make it better. the original phrase is
jan Soweli_elepanto says it would be better to say it like ...
mi pali e moku. ni li ike tawa mi. sina pilin ala pilin e sama?
but i'm hesitate. please advice