sona pi sin ala

[jan Alanto]

soweli pi sin ala en soweli wawa

soweli pi sike suno mute li tawa ma Apika poka jan pona ona. ona li tawa ma kasi. taso soweli pi sin ala li kama weka tan jan ona lon ma kasi. soweli wawa li kama li lukin e soweli pi sin ala li open alasa e ona. soweli pi sin ala li pilin e monsuta li toki e ni lon lawa: "pakala! soweli wawa li wile alasa e mi. mi o seme?".

soweli pi sin ala li lukin e kiwen walo soweli lon poka ona li kama jo e sona pona. soweli wawa li poka mute la ona li uta e kiwen ni li toki wawa e ni: "a! soweli ni li pona moku mute! taso mi wile moku e soweli sin." tenpo ni la soweli wawa li pilin e monsuta li tawa weka tan soweli pi sin ala.

soweli kasi li lukin e ni ali. "soweli pi sin ala ni li sona. mi wile tawa sewi pi kasi suli tan soweli wawa. taso ona li weka e soweli wawa kepeken sona taso. mi toki e ni tawa soweli wawa la mi kama pona tawa ona. tenpo kama la soweli pi sin ala ni li kama sona e nasin lawa pi ma kasi."

soweli kasi li toki e ni tawa soweli wawa: ijo pi kiwen walo soweli li toki taso. "soweli pona o, soweli pi sin ala li nasa e sina." soweli wawa li mu wawa li toki e ni: "mi weka ala e ike pi soweli pi sin ala. ona li moku mi. soweli pona mi o, o tawa poka mi. mi mute o pana e sona pi ijo pi ma kasi tawa soweli ike pi sin ala ni."

soweli pi sin ala li lukin e kama pi ona tu. soweli wawa li wile utala li wile moku e ona. soweli kasi li suli pilin taso, tan ni: ona li pona tawa soweli wawa. soweli pi sin ala li toki insa e ni: "soweli kasi li toki e pali mi tawa soweli wawa. mi pakala!"

soweli pi sin ala li sike mute e suno. wawa ona li lili. taso sona ona li suli. ona li ken weka tan ni kepeken nasin seme? ona li toki wawa e ni: "soweli kasi li lon seme? ona li wile tawa mi e soweli wawa. mi wile moku! mi tu li wile tu e ona tawa mi tu." soweli wawa li kute e ni la ona li utala e soweli kasi li moli e ona. tenpo sin la ona li tawa weka tan soweli pi sin ala.

pini!
jan pi pana sona mi li toki e toki ni. sona ona li ni: jan pi sin ala li lukin e ijo mute lon tenpo ona. tan ni la ona li sona e ijo mute.

[janKipo]

pona mute.
Apparently 'sin ala' is not so good for "old' in the sense of "aged many years", but I think it is too deeply ingrained to be a problem.
'pilin e monsuta' "feel fear but the meaning of 'monsuta', "monster" is not too clear yet beyond that basic, is it "fearsome" or "fearful", for example. I suspect, if it means "fearful", the best way of saying this is just 'li monsuta; or 'li monsuat pilin', but this need some work yet.
'mi o seme', a question imperative or hortative seems odd. Surely, just the question is enough 'mi seme?' or (to be clear) 'mi pali seme?' (or maybe 'mi seme pali?'
"beast white stone"?
or 'mi tu'
'soweli pi ma pi kasi suli' is maybe some sort of monkey, which may be 'jan' (but that is confusing).

[jan Alanto]

pona. toki mi li suli. taso pakala li lili. ("pona la pakala mi li lili tawa suli pi toki mi" following those new trends)
As for "mi o seme", I'd rather not use "mi seme?" because it is more like an affirmative (I do something I don't know. What is it?). What about "mi ken/wile (pali) seme"?
beast white stone = bone (later simplified to just kiwen soweli)

[janKipo]

pona mute.