monsuta lon mi

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monsuta lon mi

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NOTE: a non-Pu word is used for poetic reasons.
I do not intend to write a Pu-compliant version.

9/11 2017: fixed a few lines that didn't make sense


mi jo e monsuta
monsuta li ali lon insa mi
monsuta li jo e wile
sama mi en sina
taso wile ni li ike
ni li sama jan ante
monsuta li awen lon insa mi
monsuta li awen e wile ona
Last edited by jan_Pusa on Mon Sep 11, 2017 2:08 am, edited 1 time in total.
olin jan li ike la ni li pakala mute.
Kung ang mahalin ka ay bawal, ito'y napakasakit.
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Re: monsuta lon mi

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'monsuta' may not be in pu, but is in wide use in the community int, i.e., is in the language.

I have a monster [maybe "fear"?]
This monster is my internal everything [?]
This monster has desires
Like you and me.
But these desires are bad.
If this is the same [?so?/lon?], a different monster
Monstrous is different inside me.
The monster changes its desires.

I don't get this one, but this is what it seems to say.
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Look like it needs some edits... I'll get back to it when I come back from my vacay/holiday. Btw, have you read my PM? I sent the preface for checking. Thanks!
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I think I have responded to everything I have received.
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Hmm... I have resent the preface via PM. Please check your inbox again. pona!
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My files show that I sent a replay on Sept 9, but when I look at the record of our exchange I find something totally different. I don't know what happened but I am resending my original reply (with some minor corrections).
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