pona mute. sama tenpo ali la sina pilin ike kin. taso sina sitelen pona.
As a former I-E linguist, I am put off slightly by the use of eta for /j/ and more by omega for /w/. For the latter Greek has the digamma (which looks like /F/), but the former is covered, in Modern Greek, anyhow, by a gamma-iota digraph or ligature. (I see the standard keyboard doesn't have digamma and the digraph looks wrong, so this will probably do.) In the devanagari, ओलीन either needs a mark on the final character to show it does not have a following vowel or needs to skip that vowel and just put a dot above the previous syllable (the latter is best). The rest look OK, but I am not good at checking Oriental characters.
I suspect that 'wan taso' actually modifies 'mi', which is not an official use of the of 'la phrases, but I don't know a good way to work around that and keep the syllable count.