meli li jo e lipu (The Girl with the Book)

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meli li jo e lipu (The Girl with the Book)

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sina wan taso lon tomo
sina jo e lipu lon luka sina
suno li lon linja sina
sina pona lukin. taso sina lukin pona mute tan ni
mi wile kama sona e sina
li wile pilin e luka sina
ali la mi wile e ni: mi lon poka sina
meli li jo e lipu
Last edited by jan_Pusa on Sat Jul 07, 2018 3:48 am, edited 1 time in total.
olin jan li ike la ni li pakala mute.
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Re: meli li jo e lipu (The Girl with the Book)

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prov 'pona lukin' ("pretty", not "good eyesight") and so 'pona mute lukin'
pona mute.
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Re: meli li jo e lipu (The Girl with the Book)

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jan Pusa o, toki.

You forgot the punctuation mark. Maybe this is what you mean?

sina wan taso lon tomo.
sina jo e lipu lon luka sina.
suno li lon linja sina.
sina lukin pona.
taso sina lukin pona mute tan ni.
mi wile kama sona e sina li wile pilin e luka sina ali la mi wile e ni: mi lon poka sina.
meli li jo e lipu.

The penultimate sentence is very long and not a good Toki Pona Style for me.
pona!
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Re: meli li jo e lipu (The Girl with the Book)

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I took the periods to come at the end of the line except for the fourth from end case where the 'li' at the beginning of the next line forced a continuance. In particular, I didn't take the third from end line to run on into the penultimate one, but took 'ali la' as some very general condition "altogether, in every case" or maybe just "in summary". After 'tan ni' should be a colon, not a period, I suppose.
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