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meli li jo e lipu (The Girl with the Book)

Posted: Tue Dec 01, 2015 9:21 pm
by jan_Pusa
sina wan taso lon tomo
sina jo e lipu lon luka sina
suno li lon linja sina
sina pona lukin. taso sina lukin pona mute tan ni
mi wile kama sona e sina
li wile pilin e luka sina
ali la mi wile e ni: mi lon poka sina
meli li jo e lipu

Re: meli li jo e lipu (The Girl with the Book)

Posted: Tue Dec 01, 2015 10:54 pm
by janKipo
prov 'pona lukin' ("pretty", not "good eyesight") and so 'pona mute lukin'
pona mute.

Re: meli li jo e lipu (The Girl with the Book)

Posted: Thu Dec 03, 2015 6:50 am
by jan_Lope
jan Pusa o, toki.

You forgot the punctuation mark. Maybe this is what you mean?

sina wan taso lon tomo.
sina jo e lipu lon luka sina.
suno li lon linja sina.
sina lukin pona.
taso sina lukin pona mute tan ni.
mi wile kama sona e sina li wile pilin e luka sina ali la mi wile e ni: mi lon poka sina.
meli li jo e lipu.

The penultimate sentence is very long and not a good Toki Pona Style for me.

Re: meli li jo e lipu (The Girl with the Book)

Posted: Thu Dec 03, 2015 10:26 am
by janKipo
I took the periods to come at the end of the line except for the fourth from end case where the 'li' at the beginning of the next line forced a continuance. In particular, I didn't take the third from end line to run on into the penultimate one, but took 'ali la' as some very general condition "altogether, in every case" or maybe just "in summary". After 'tan ni' should be a colon, not a period, I suppose.