First toki pona poem.
kasi li pali e kili.
pipi li moku e kili.
kala li moku e pipi.
waso li moku e kala.
soweli li moku e waso.
akesi li moku e soweli.
akesi li moli.
ona li pana moku e kasi.
kasi li pali e kili mute.
tenpo sike ali.
jan li lukin e ni ali.
ona li lukin e ni ali pona.
tenpo sike ali
Re: tenpo sike ali
Pona!
Minor questions: 'moll' or 'Kama moli'? Dead or dies? What does 'ona' in line 8 refer to (apparently akesi). 'pana moku' "emit foodily"? "all circular time" ? Maybe 'tenpo Ali li sike'? I suppose you mean 'ona li lukin e ni Ali sama pona'.
Minor questions: 'moll' or 'Kama moli'? Dead or dies? What does 'ona' in line 8 refer to (apparently akesi). 'pana moku' "emit foodily"? "all circular time" ? Maybe 'tenpo Ali li sike'? I suppose you mean 'ona li lukin e ni Ali sama pona'.
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Re: tenpo sike ali
The akesi dies. kama moli?janSilipu wrote:Pona!
Minor questions: 'moll' or 'Kama moli'? Dead or dies? What does 'ona' in line 8 refer to (apparently akesi). 'pana moku' "emit foodily"? "all circular time" ? Maybe 'tenpo Ali li sike'? I suppose you mean 'ona li lukin e ni Ali sama pona'.
Yes, ona does refer to the akesi.
pana moku is intended to be "gives food". Of course, it's moku that is the direct object, not kasi. *goes and looks up indirect objects*
tenpo sike ali means "circular time is complete/whole".
ona li lukin e ni ali pona is "he/she sees that all this is good." ni Ali sama pona would be better here?
edit: can't find anything on indirect objects. How do we do that, a preposition?
Re: tenpo sike ali
Indirect object is 'tawa', so 'ona li pana e moku tawa kasi' (or whatever will keep the poetry)
'ona li lukin e ni: Ali li pona'
'tenpo sike li Ali/pini'
'ona li lukin e ni: Ali li pona'
'tenpo sike li Ali/pini'
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Re: tenpo sike ali
pona mute.
mi wile sitelen mute.
mi wile sitelen mute.