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http://www.sinfest.net/archive_page.php?comicID=3386

jan Suliko o pakala ala e nasin pi jan lawa,
jan Suliko o anpa ala e telo pi oko tu,

o pana ala e sinpin pi pilin ike,
mi toki e sina tan ni:

jan Satan li kama tawa ma tomo!
jan li pali e lipu pi nimi mute kepeken telo loje sijelo,
jan li kama lon e sina lon ko ma,

jan Satan Kuwasu li koma tawa ma tomo!
jan li sona e tenpo ni: sina lape,
jan li sona e tenpo ni: sina pakala,
jan li sona e ni: mi mute li pakala pini,
o lon e jan pakala o musi mute!

o pakala ala e nasin pi jan lawa,
o anpa ala e telo pi oko tu,

o pana ala e sinpin pi pilin ike,
mi toki e sina tan ni:

jan Satan li kama tawa ma tomo!
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Re: sitelen pi nimi Inli Sinfest

Post by janKipo »

Oh my! Somehow I forgot to worry about what manga might do to Christmas this year (too busy worrying about Christianists, I guess).
So, who is Suliko (I don't keep up in that particular subworld).
Why "Don't destroy the way of the leader" for "Don't shout"? 'o kalama mute ala' or some more details like 'kepeken uta' perhaps.
Next two slick as owl snot
But "I say you because:" doesn't hack it; for one thing, I can't say you -- you're neither a linguistic expression nor a concept/proposition. 'mi toki e tan ni tawa sina' "I tell you this explanation"
Maybe 'anpa e sina lon ko ma'
Why leave teh 'Kuwasu' off the first time?
probably ' jan li sona e tenpo pi ike sina' and similarly for 'pakala'
I( would go for 'ike ali' for "totally corrupt" but that is aesthetic, 'pakala pini' sounds more like totally destroyed, without the moral flavor.
"Place the ruined people"? just 'o ike (ali/pini/...)'

Seeing it in tp hardly helps.
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